One of the people that I admire the most is my
grandfather Ernesto.
Firstly, my grandfather does not care what they
say. He met my grandmother in 1960, she had a little boy, but no matter what
people said, he got married with her. Also, she is 5 years older. I think the
Chilean context and I am proud for my Tata (I say Tata to my grandfather).Secondly, my grandparents were a poor family, but my grandfather always worked to his family would eat. Once when my aunt was 10 years old wanted entry to an English program (She always has been good to English, now she is English teacher), and my Tata worked extra hours to pay that program to my aunt. With this story he is an example for me when I will be father.
Thirdly, He always has been a responsible person, now with 76 years he work. I like his grandson he teach me the responsibility. He never don’t go to his job. He wake up to 4:00 AM to come his job to 7:30 AM and do all before his bosses come.
In conclusion, I admire and I am so proud of my
grandfather because he is a great father, husband and grandfather. I always
said, he is the best person in this world.
I never met my grandfhaders, so enjoy it. Now, I also admire your Tata.
ResponderBorrarNice post
Your grandfather is a man worth admiring
ResponderBorrarIt shows that he loved his family
sebastián,
ResponderBorrarTS: One of the people that I admire the most is my grandfather Ernesto.
SS1: Firstly, my grandfather does not care ABOUT what they say.
EXPLANATION: He met my grandmother in 1960, she had a little boy, but no matter what people said, he got married with her.
EXP. 2: Also, she is 5 years older THAN HIM.
COMMENT: I think ABOUT the Chilean context and I am proud [for] OF my Tata (I [say Tata to] CALL my grandfather "TATA").
SS2: Secondly, my grandparents were a poor family, but my grandfather always worked [to] SO his family "C"ould eat.
EXP?: Once when my aunt was 10 years old SHE wanted [entry to] TO ENTER an English program
COMMENT: (She always has been good [to] AT English, now she is AN English teacher),
EXP 2: and my Tata worked extra hours to pay that program to my aunt.
SS3: With this story he is an example for me when I [will be] AM A father.
SS4: Thirdly, He always has been a responsible person, now with 76 years OF AGE, he workS. [I like] AS his grandson, he [teach] TAUGHT me [the] ABOUT responsibility.
EXP: He never [don’t go to his job] MISSED WORK. He wOke up [to] AT 4:00 AM to [come his job] GO TO WORK [to] AT 7:30 AM and do all before his bosses cAme.
In conclusion, I admire and I am so proud of my grandfather because he is a great father, husband and grandfather. I always [said] SAY, he is the best person in this world.
Good structure in general terms, your edition re. grammar and lexis is not so good though. Interesting testimonial piece of writing.